A chilly breeze plucked a white petal off the tulip sitting at the open window.
He loves me.
A second plucked petal floated with the breeze before coming to a rest on the damp soil.
He loves me not.
The flowerpot trembled as a stronger wind burst through the window panes, scattering petals in the air.
He broke my heart.
A thunderous gust flung the flowerpot across the room, shattered the clay and showered the floor with soil.
So I’ll break everything he’s got.
© Jade M. Wong
Revised and rewritten. I’ve been revisiting my older poetry and writings lately, since it’s been hard to focus on writing something new. How’s everyone else doing today?
Sweet vengeancy goodness. I like it! And yes, ‘vengeancy’ is a perfectly fine and totally real word.
Haha! Vengeancy…it does have a nice ring to it. I approve 😀
Thanks TUS!
Haha I loved this – the way you spun her story out of white petals and broken needles! Break my heart – I break your plant and pot!
Hehe thanks Gina 😀 A woman scorned and all, eh?
I like the revenge part – well in writing only – I am a timid mouse and would probably be watering all his plants – which I did for a long time – till he came and took it all back! Fab story!
There’s a lioness in all of us, my friend 🙂
I loved this! The subtle poetry in the background. Nicely executed piece, Jade! 🙂
Ahh you caught the poetry! I’m so glad you noticed it Shaun 😀 Thanks for reading!
Yeah, git ‘im!
Oops! I didn’t mean this as a reply – I was on my phone and misclicked when trying to make a standalone comment. T_T
Haha, it’s okay!
Lovely imagery with the petals, and then the brutality of the broken flowerpot. Nicelly done.
Thank you 🙂 I appreciate the read and comment!
Hello. What’s up? I hope everything’s doing well with you! I’ve been reading your posts and I just wanna let you know that because of posts like these, I am so proud to be a part of this community, you guys are creative and profound. I’ll follow your blog and I hope you could follow my Blog as well. Have fun writing! Thank you for being an inspiration to many. 🙂
Heh, nice!
Thanks 😀
Dear Jade,
I loved the progression in this from gentle and lovely to vengeance. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you for stopping by Rochelle! Glad you liked the little tale 🙂
Yes, I love the poetic feel of this and the way it escalates to a loud crescendo!
Thanks so much! Happy you enjoyed it 🙂
Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned! Excellent 🙂
Thanks Iain! And you got that right haha!
Powerful. You packed a lot of punch into a small space. I love your quote from Cyril Connolly, too. “Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self.”
I agree!
Thank you for reading! I’m glad you liked the quote. It’s definitely a quote that keeps me on the right path 🙂
This is beautiful.
Thank you very much 🙂
I completely agree with Dale. Well done.
Thanks! Appreciate the read and comment ^_^
Well done!
Thanks 😀
just wondering what would she do when he comes with a bouquet of red roses. 🙂
Oooh, that’s an ending I don’t think she sees coming, so I wonder myself 😉
I like the positivity of the ending. Even a desire for revenge indicates some degree of positivity. 🙂 Nicely done.
Thank you Sandra! Yes, a little positivity can be found in just about any situation 🙂
WOAH!!! That last line smells bloooooood, Jade! Love the way the tale unfolded. <3
Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned! Thanks for reading Rosema <3
i agree. you’re welcome, Jade! <3
Ouch!
Don’t mess with a heart broken woman.
Couldn’t agree more! 😉
Reblogged this on TheKingsKidChronicles and commented:
Flash fiction by Jade M. Wong. Great piece of writing, concise and to the point with emotions poured out. Reblogged from https://jademwong.wordpress.com
Perfect. Love the entire piece, but the finale was great.
Thank you! So glad to see you back and hoping for your good health and smooth recovery 🙂
Everything is going well. Thank you
Strong emotions and beautifully expressed
Thank you Sadje, I appreciate the read and comment ^_^
You’re welcome Jade
This is really beautifully written! Can’t believe I’ve only now stumbled upon your work 😊
Aww thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed. Please feel free to stumble my way again 😉
This was well written.
Thank you, Diana 🙂
You’re welcome, Jade!